Writing a Report in Paragraphs

📋 Zoe’s tourism report — notes and two drafts

60 residents surveyed, 2–9 March · good for jobs/money: 45 (75%) · biggest problem: traffic 28, litter 15, noise 10, house prices 7 · support £1 tourist tax: 41 (68%) · ideas: park-and-ride bus, more bins, quiet hours in old town
I did a survey about tourism and I asked 60 people and 45 of them said it was good for jobs and money but the biggest problem was traffic which 28 people said and also litter which 15 said and noise 10 and house prices 7 and 41 people supported the tourist tax which is 68% and people had ideas like a bus and more bins and quiet hours and I think tourism is good but we need to fix the problems.
This report presents the results of a survey on tourism in Sunbeam Bay. Sixty residents were asked for their views between 2 and 9 March.
Overall, residents see tourism as positive for the town. Three quarters of respondents (75%) said that it was good for jobs and the local economy.
However, respondents also had several concerns. The most common was traffic, mentioned by 28 people, followed by litter (15), noise (10) and house prices (7).
The majority (68%) supported the proposed £1 tourist tax. Respondents suggested that the money should pay for a summer park-and-ride bus, more bins and quiet hours in the old town.
In conclusion, tourism is welcome in Sunbeam Bay, but residents want its problems to be managed. I recommend that the council introduces the tax and spends it on these three ideas.
Mrs Hill: Zoe, your first draft has all the right information, but it is one long sentence joined with “and”! The second draft is a real report: an introduction, three body paragraphs that each start with a clear topic sentence, and a conclusion with a recommendation. You also turned numbers into percentages and fractions, which makes them easier to read. Excellent.